 | | | мне, тоже неучу, тоже нравится. хотя с атмосферой ( это Жене), действительно произошли забавные вещи, в частности, с рифмами и потоком текста. |
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| | | Ничего не знаю, мне, неучу, понравилось. По-моему, очень красиво. |
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| | | fair enough. anxiety of influence is a common threat, i agree. however, your text breaks up in word clusters, whereas the original flows smoothely. it's not called a Song for nothing. this is a part of conveying the "atmosphere". |
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| | | as for me, the main in poetru translation is to keep original sense
and atmosphere. that is the goal of sacrificing both form and meaning.
i haven't read Bunin's translation and i won't do it until i finish my
own work - just to keep the impression.
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| | | A couple of questions:
1. What principles of translation are following?
2. As a translator, you are often forced to choose between form and meaning. What effect are you pursuing by sacrificing both?
3. What is, in your opinion, wrong with Bunin's translation of the "The Song of Hiawatha"?
Thanks, =Z= |
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